- sustained textual analysis demonstrating good use of media terminology.
- fairly decent range of texts in your bibliography
- very good media terminology
- good use of research
- included representation analysis
- good critical debate of the young vs old
EBI:
- lack of references on pages: 2,3,4
- shorter paragraphs
- reference theories you discuss in your footnotes (e.g, Hall, Cohen, Dyer) + explain them.
- include how audiences respond to texts in different ways. ( different pleasures for teenagers) target market
- proof read - re-prepare paragraph
- mise-en-scene could be linked to narrative theories with analysis. - include audience theory when talking about representation.
- could link to moral panics - media exaggerated the stereotype.
Level/grade : level 3 - B/A
Action Plan:
- Add in more references at the beginning of essay.
- Split up my paragraphs appropriately.
- I need to do more research in terms of adding in theorists.
- I also need to research more about representation of youth.
- link my analysis to narrative theories.
- I need to include audience pleasures and theories more.
- Proof read my essay.
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